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Remember that fake first chapter to my fake novel from last year's April Fools? Today, I'm bringing you the first chapter of the real novel I'm actually writing. :P
Bear in mind this is a first draft, so a lot of things will be changed in the final version. Like Hemingway said, first drafts are always shitty. That said, I'm open to critique, questions, suggestions and whatnot so I can improve the story before publication. :3 "The Great Phantasmo" is a place-holder name, so I may replace it with something better. But he's later revealed to be the same person as Marius, just hiding under another alias. :P The Robert Heinlein musical mentioned in this chapter is actually something my grandfather tried to start on Broadway, and it being rejected by Richard Rogers and why is a true story. Unlike in my novel however, the musical never got performed. :( The lyrics Ann sings are what my Dad remembers from one of the songs.
With those little notes out of the way, onto the fun!
( This stops being a children's book as soon as attempted murder and toy violence is involved. Whoops. )
Next chapter, we see what happened to Raggedy Ann and are introduced to our main villain, Dr. Medlock. From now on, the chapters switch between Andy's journey to find her (and dealing with Medlock's assistant Phantasmo/Marius) and Ann surviving the lab. Don't worry, everything's still third-person. :)
Bear in mind this is a first draft, so a lot of things will be changed in the final version. Like Hemingway said, first drafts are always shitty. That said, I'm open to critique, questions, suggestions and whatnot so I can improve the story before publication. :3 "The Great Phantasmo" is a place-holder name, so I may replace it with something better. But he's later revealed to be the same person as Marius, just hiding under another alias. :P The Robert Heinlein musical mentioned in this chapter is actually something my grandfather tried to start on Broadway, and it being rejected by Richard Rogers and why is a true story. Unlike in my novel however, the musical never got performed. :( The lyrics Ann sings are what my Dad remembers from one of the songs.
With those little notes out of the way, onto the fun!
( This stops being a children's book as soon as attempted murder and toy violence is involved. Whoops. )
Next chapter, we see what happened to Raggedy Ann and are introduced to our main villain, Dr. Medlock. From now on, the chapters switch between Andy's journey to find her (and dealing with Medlock's assistant Phantasmo/Marius) and Ann surviving the lab. Don't worry, everything's still third-person. :)
